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2023-10-17 02:00

I am only about 100 chapters in, but i quite like this story. I want to take some time to explain some of the things it does well:First, the story does the background of the prior life quickly giving only enough information for the reader to have expectations. A single chapter, and then she starts planning.Second, the main character's knowledge is mostly the reader's knowledge. There is no attempt to look smart by hiding the key information from the reader. Rather, she plans and acts with the information we have. She doesn't magically know everything and is trying to figure out the same details as the reader. this is an excellent way to build a connection between character and reader.Third, there are lots of things we just don't know. the author clearly has to have an idea of what is going on in the background but doesn't spend chapter after chapter about the world. the story is about the mc, not the world as a whole.fourth, the transitions are done appropriately. They go to conclusion and not going to inappropriate tension levels out of the blue. an example is a scene where the bad guys are talking about what to do. they discuss have their internal drama and then make a final decision with action before the scene moves on. most webnovels try to hop from one place to another repeating the same thing but it actually makes the scene less impactful because it happens too much. going to conclusion and then moving to the next relevant scene allows for contrast in the entire process rather than mirroring which gets boring quickly.Finally, the number of 'active' parties in any situation is not excessive. only the most important decisions are spelled out while the rest of the scenes happen and are only displayed as part of other activities or through details. this reduces extraneous words and keeps the reader engaged.I hope these concepts can help another writer see what is done well here.

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