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2020-09-11 05:26

The story is well written and has a very serious tone throughout so far. The setting is interesting and there's been a lot of build up so far for future events. My only criticism so far is the lack of show not tell. Several emotions that were outright stated could be implied instead with descriptions of facial expressions for instance.

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