This book.isn't for me.the prologue is too long.and i thought that there was a japanese vibe going on.unfortunately the author.did not capture.that vibe.as for the structure of the story it's bland.and boring. and very VERY scripted.i can't feel the emotions of the characters it's as if it is forced. the personalities of the characters is also forced. your grammar is somewhat tolerable but know how to use proper words in a sentence. as well as proper commas and periods. NOT JUST THAT but fix the broken words of the sentences those are making me cringe so much. i was excited when i saw this book but my excitement turned into instant dissapointment. i also read what the author said. you apologise for your mistakes but your apology doesn't validate.to anything if you don't fix it. Your writing just lacks.professionalism.i'm sorry to say. it's as if.a kid wrote it. and yet a children's book is more fun than this. i rarely give.5.0 star but to those who earned and deserve it. right now.this book is 2-3 stars in my view.
FaKie_KitSuKo
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LIKEFaKie_KitSuKo:hello thank you for being the first person that gives me a critic review english is not my mother language so please tolerate me for being horrible at English but beside that I'll take all your critics into consideration thank you so much i will do my best to fix my way of writings as well
i should thank you in fact haha i am new i just joined a few weeks ago and i do know how well "bad" my story is that's why i need critics like this a lot i will put my time on fixing my chapters for now and i hope the next time you stop by you will be satisfied again thank you
sunakodwallflower:an author.that takes criticism.well (。・ω・。)ノ♡ very rare indeed.i'll give this book another chance.
good.for you.if you are.new.in writing then i suggest you.read up.a.lot in english words.or maybe use.a dictionary.to assist yourself.because calling.something a book.with this kind.of writing.is an insult.to authors all around the world.i know that everybody has.different languages.but if you are aiming for english audience.then you.should enhance.your english skills.in writing and comprehension.i notice that your reviews are either bs.buttering you up.and nonsense.i also notice the reviews of.my favorite authors.but maybe they are just sugar coating words to not hurt your feelings.but sometimes sugar coating words doesn't help.it makes you blind from the reality of the truth.that you have mistakes.it also inflates EGO making you delusional that your work is.okay or alright in this case.it's far from it.good luck in writing and making this book better.maybe i'll come back and re-review it again.i am not making you feel OBLIGATED but you as an author IS OBLIGATED to present a quality book to your readers not just write like a child. hope the time i re-read this it's much better.everything is fixed (。・ω・。)ノ♡
FaKie_KitSuKo:i should thank you in fact haha i am new i just joined a few weeks ago and i do know how well "bad" my story is that's why i need critics like this a lot i will put my time on fixing my chapters for now and i hope the next time you stop by you will be satisfied again thank you
FaKie_KitSuKo:i should thank you in fact haha i am new i just joined a few weeks ago and i do know how well "bad" my story is that's why i need critics like this a lot i will put my time on fixing my chapters for now and i hope the next time you stop by you will be satisfied again thank you
if you are saying my story is bad i am aware and i'm trying my best to fix it it will take a while cause i am also busy with IRL work
Anotoki:'bad story' 21 days later. *353 people added your book to library*
FaKie_KitSuKo:if you are saying my story is bad i am aware and i'm trying my best to fix it it will take a while cause i am also busy with IRL work
Anotoki:Yo, relax! It was a joke, jeez. People can't take a joke these days huh.