Review Detail of amaturewriter in Dxd : Undead
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The only reason why I didnt give a single star was cause u wrote long chps. but u know, OVERLORD....AINZ...these two , are things that dont bow or become servants. AINZ becoming a servant even temporarily is retarded.
Dxd : Undead
Xshamee
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He's trying to say that you making Ainz a servant is a no go. I ain't even read the story yet, but I wont. I generally dislike MC's that join ones peerage in DxD and don't create their own, even if he is to betray them later on it still leaves a bitter taste that someone that should rival Sirzechs who's the 7th strongest being in DxD, if not surpass him and MAYBE be on the same tier as the gods such as Shiva and Indra whom are respectfully 3rd and 4th. (Great Red + Great Beast being 1st & Ophis being 2nd). To sum it all up, you making a person that has that much power a servant is stupid and many people dislike it. Have a good day :)
Xshamee:I do not know what the relation between 'joining peerage' and 'being her bitch' is but it was planned. Though more exposition would happen in the future. Alas, I'm lazy to update frequently and now stop commenting and let me read 'Barbatus king' dxd fanfic and have a nice day.
Xshamee:What? I just barely wrote 2 chapters and I got 3 stars already. Can you please elaborate on what the exact problem is? Instead of vague words like 'I don't like or I don't like that.'
Thank you for your input.Well. I just wanted to pull it around until Khaos brigade arc and pull the betrayal card, you know. Around that time he gets a good grasp of the power of the supernatural world and betrays them wholeheartedly. He talks with shub nig and basically brings Nazarick and starts his own religion. Well, if it garners support I will write, or if not it will the last chapter. Anyways, thanks for the review. Peace:)
amaturewriter:AINZ becoming a servant. I even said it. you mustve watched overlord no?
nah...I am out.. U made a ruler of the most power guild a bitch. and no offense but its also very generic....all FFs are kinda generic but some more that others...ie: SI MC in naruto joining konoha,BNHA MC being friends with 1 - A, DXD joining peerage, etc
Xshamee:Thank you for your input.Well. I just wanted to pull it around until Khaos brigade arc and pull the betrayal card, you know. Around that time he gets a good grasp of the power of the supernatural world and betrays them wholeheartedly. He talks with shub nig and basically brings Nazarick and starts his own religion. Well, if it garners support I will write, or if not it will the last chapter. Anyways, thanks for the review. Peace:)
Also AINZ was interesting cause he was a planner and ruler and smart, and he was super OP from the start. the secret plans and mind games he did was what made overlord great, and you more or less removed all of it by making MC directly joking a peerage. u made him kinda a bitch, and not smart cause [ dude just believed what ever rias said ]
Xshamee:Thank you for your input.Well. I just wanted to pull it around until Khaos brigade arc and pull the betrayal card, you know. Around that time he gets a good grasp of the power of the supernatural world and betrays them wholeheartedly. He talks with shub nig and basically brings Nazarick and starts his own religion. Well, if it garners support I will write, or if not it will the last chapter. Anyways, thanks for the review. Peace:)
Xshamee:Thank you for your input.Well. I just wanted to pull it around until Khaos brigade arc and pull the betrayal card, you know. Around that time he gets a good grasp of the power of the supernatural world and betrays them wholeheartedly. He talks with shub nig and basically brings Nazarick and starts his own religion. Well, if it garners support I will write, or if not it will the last chapter. Anyways, thanks for the review. Peace:)
I do not know what the relation between 'joining peerage' and 'being her bitch' is but it was planned. Though more exposition would happen in the future. Alas, I'm lazy to update frequently and now stop commenting and let me read 'Barbatus king' dxd fanfic and have a nice day.
amaturewriter:Also AINZ was interesting cause he was a planner and ruler and smart, and he was super OP from the start. the secret plans and mind games he did was what made overlord great, and you more or less removed all of it by making MC directly joking a peerage. u made him kinda a bitch, and not smart cause [ dude just believed what ever rias said ]