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JakeElliott1yrCommentedI'm enjoying this, perhaps make an interlude of peoples thoughts about what's happened or maybe an extra chapter where people are reacting to what happened and most of all praising the MC for his 'heroic' deeds and the aftermath of what happened because of it maybe? Reckon it'll be interesting to read and give you more words for the story. Thanks!
Ch 9 CHAPTER 8: ONE SCREAM OVER- JakeElliott1yrCommentedCh 218 CHAPTER 211
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good taste mate!
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This chapter has been deleted. - JakeElliott3yrReplied to ErozothDraeor
Completely agree... He's had like 5 attempts at his life and such yet he let's them off. Feels like I'm reading a chinese novel where the mc constantly repeats the same thing and has different young masters challenge him repeatedly until the MC grows strong enough to ignore him even after the antagonist beat him and kept well antagonising him...
Ch 50 Chapter 50 - The Elder - JakeElliott3yrReplied to Xshamee
He's trying to say that you making Ainz a servant is a no go. I ain't even read the story yet, but I wont. I generally dislike MC's that join ones peerage in DxD and don't create their own, even if he is to betray them later on it still leaves a bitter taste that someone that should rival Sirzechs who's the 7th strongest being in DxD, if not surpass him and MAYBE be on the same tier as the gods such as Shiva and Indra whom are respectfully 3rd and 4th. (Great Red + Great Beast being 1st & Ophis being 2nd). To sum it all up, you making a person that has that much power a servant is stupid and many people dislike it. Have a good day :)
- JakeElliott3yrCommented
Couldn't have changed the backstory slightly
I'd long given up on the idea of love. Or at least the idea I had while I was still naive and human. The idea of finding a mate, to be specific. Why wouldn't I? I was violated by my fiancee and his friends before I was turned. One of the people I was supposed to be able to trust betrayed me and left me for dead. Even thinking about it made my chest cold and my extremities numb. Both in anger and...fear. Which made no sense to me. - JakeElliott3yrReplied to Valorant_343
I've summed his review up. Writing Quality : Good Character Design : Meh, OP guy is enslaved to someone weaker (Which in DxD shouldn't be possible as they'd have to have more power) World Background : Just DxD ennit ? Update Stability : Can't really judge that as of yet Story Development : The same as many others.