I do not like romance, but the mystery kept me in. The story is funny with your style of writing (although the writing style is not my cup of tea). The story is interesting and not bad for people who is into this kind of story. There are a few problems with your grammar and I won’t lie the dialogue would confuse me between the MC and the guy because they go hot and cold while also feeling cliché. It wasn’t for me. But your story have potential and knows how to keep a person coming back. Keep up the good work!
Nekonigiri001
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LIKEThank you for the constructive feedback - I love grammar nazi and those pointing out my flaw while being nice since they could help me better myself, truly appreciate it. Also, I'm glad you managed to single out the mystery genre because that has been my aim among all and I'm grateful that you are reading it despite it's not your usual preference. Thank you for the encouragement :D