Item: One Piece: System
Rating: 3
Author: jonknowsnothing

jonknowsnothingLv14yr

2020-09-26 01:45

This story has the potential to be one of the best on the site, but it's been all put ruined. The author has fallen into the trap that most gamer/system stories do. That is to say, they have zero restraint when it comes to the system. To the point that thing are just ridiculous. It hits all the boxes of poorly designed system fictions. Given a Devil Fruit right off the bat, despite doing nothing to earn it. The system also (apparently) makes random changes to reality to make his life easier. The system applies to his Devil Fruit, so no experimenting, creativity or training. Just adding XP to the Devil Fruit tab. Also hinted he will get another Devil Fruit. One of the worst OP tropes. The system store that has no limits, including weapons from other anime and devil fruits. Gets a "mind palace". AKA a grinding system that lets the MC become even more OP by simply sitting in a corner while they sail around. Caps on learning skills are super low. He's able to learn Rokushiki before he even gets into the Grand Line. Super specific hidden quests that the MC just so happen to do anyway. What are the chances! And so on. There's a lot to enjoy, but it's mired in constant upgrades and BS rewards that take any suspense or tension out of the story. If you want to turn your brain off and read power fantasy wanking than you'll probably enjoy it. Otherwise, meh.

One Piece: System

PsyChotiX556

4.3

46 Chs

Liked by 53 people

Replies7

AlucardVonHellsingLv11

hey i have a request. can you look over my book? i use a system in it but i typically ignore that it is a thing after a few chapters in. i like you points in this review and would apprciate a review of my own. i would like to know your thoughts about my system and how its used. if you want to fufill my request you can just comment on a chapter i will more than likely see it if it is a respone to one of my own or a new comment. thanks.

4yr

Bard_FallLv3

mate most of these author doesnt play proper grinding games before lol... And people who love playing them wont write novels as they would prefer to play their game instead.

4yr

Insert_NicknameLv5

Spitting facts

Bard_Fall:mate most of these author doesnt play proper grinding games before lol... And people who love playing them wont write novels as they would prefer to play their game instead.

4yr

blooLv14

Bro, most of these authors are probably youngsters. God knows what kind of taste I had when I was 15 y/o. They don't put that much thought into what makes sense, just what is cool

Bard_Fall:mate most of these author doesnt play proper grinding games before lol... And people who love playing them wont write novels as they would prefer to play their game instead.

4yr

thehivemindLv5

You don't earn a devil fruit. U get lucky and find one

4yr

a_random_trioLv3

meh if you were the person inside onepiece wouldn't you want a devil fruit too?

4yr

SeikatsuLv5

True

a_random_trio:meh if you were the person inside onepiece wouldn't you want a devil fruit too?

4yr

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Marshal_OmigaLv1

people should try writing one piece fanfic with doflamingo or Blackbeard the mc because lot of people is kind of sick of being goody2x following luffy, saving ace, whitebeard. shits

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asaade_ragnarokmLv4

2 stars instead of 1 because he's not directly luffy's dog but instead a guard dog, the mc's goal is only the yonko and became the allied dog of luffy, also the mc is still doesn't have a crew so he temporary became luffy's dog

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This story has potential. the mc isnt weak, and inky is following luffy Until hes strong enough to get gis own crew and become the second whitebeard. which Is a respectable goal.

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Nafsu_geass28Lv2

is this a big harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem? is this a huge harem?

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Ulvr_LaochLv15

It would have been a higher vote from me but the moment the author introduced getting things from other worlds I just quit. If the MC developed the abilities or whatever then sure go ahead, no problem. but when he can get things from anime or video games different to the world/story he is in that's when I know I'm done.

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RoarrrrrLv5

more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more

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Harem_fanLv5

I have stopped reading this at chapter 38...The story is good it follows the canon story and the system is useful. the cannon characters get fleshed out decently, and some defeated bad guys get recruited. Why did I stop reading this, purely due to not liking the MC personality...he is too calculating emotionally detached for my liking, however many will like it.

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Art_EmLv1

One of the Best one piece stories there is. Though I wonder why you made max amount of AP around 10000, I mean MC boosted them only to 500 and already quiet skilled. If he gets them max out he'll be like Saitama. More plsss.

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