Review Detail of NorthStar in The Legend Of Breakfire

Thanks Author for this creative story - liking what i read. 1. Good plot - the shoe flying out from the sky indeed created a whole new dimension and where the boys couldn’t kill Ashe even they slit her throat - good twist to plant in readers mind what works and what doesn’t VR vs reality depending which dimension they came from. 2. Adrien and Ashe - looking forward to see how they will evolve post the second meet at the mansion with Ashe given this mission now to eliminate the characters 3. Kai and the other boys (which name reminds me of Ninjago :) - interesting creativity on how they existed from a faulty game development and created chaos in public 4. Darren - looking to see how he will shoulder the responsibility and fix this - enjoy reading how the character was introduce and the glitch Looking fwd to see how the game would evolve in the story. Leveling up capability or weapon acquisition and collection for them to eliminate the characters and perhaps some of these characters evolve over time - exciting plot. All in all good job in bringing VR and n gamification into the world of writing. Keep up the good work!