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Daoist0ccPtW
Daoist0ccPtWLv142yr
2023-05-10 20:22

It is an excellent novel, but I believe there are some points to be improved. Most of your audience has the maturity to understand that the world is not just black and white, you don't need to have a moral advantage in every dispute. There is no need to create second-rate villains to justify the MC attitudes, we understand that human beings are complex beings, we are selfish and ambitious, we always want more, the MC enemies are people who want more for their family or people, not necessarily stupid and 'evil', I'm not defending them, they should all be killed with their families, I just ask that you don't insult my intelligence. Another point I noticed is the absence of harem etiquette, I'm not asking to go out collecting pokemons, but looking at the pragmatic side, most alliances at that time are through marriage, especially someone who wants to be emperor, accepting concubines.

Building a Kingdom and Conquering the World

Stoicist
4.7
245 Chs

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No_longer_Human
No_longer_HumanLv11

indeed,how can he idolize the great genghis khan without following his footsteps in harem making endeavor?

1yr
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Stoicist
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Hey there, author here! So, I am going to rate my own story and leave this review for those who might get interested in giving it a try after reding through the synopsis. Also, please, if you are liking this novel leave your review and slowly move your fingers to that little "vote" button (press it!). HUEHUEHUE *evil laugh* - "Thank you! my dear reader!" Writing Quality – First of all, I would like to emphasize that English is not my first language and I have been studying it for five years. So, I might make a few mistakes here and there. However, I am always proofreading and using softwares to improve the writing. Story Development – I don’t think that the story development is going to deviate much from other novels. However, as a reader, I have always been losing myself when an author drifts too apart from a chronological line of events, so I am going to follow as much as possible an established order. I don’t want to write something confusing. Now, talking about the pace of the story, the start is going to be a bit chaotic, due to the situation that the MC finds himself in. However, the future chapters are going to slowly cement a flow. Character Design – I have always loved characters that are rational, self-centered, somewhat arrogant, and confident. Someone who is always planning and thinking how they can get the most of a situation, but still maintains certain values. This is the MC that I am trying to build. As for the other characters, I will be setting them according to the story’s progression. (I don't have but a few important character planned). Updating Stability – Around 2-3 chapters/week. I may exceed that amount if I have enough free time. World Background – It’s a world filled with different species, where all beings can become stronger through Mana. A world that is in the point of “rupture”. I know it’s a common setting, but I will be adding things up as the chapters are updates. However, I plan on doing a good job on that. (I hope) If you have read the synopsis and this review, and liked it, please consider giving this book a try. "Also, don't forget to leave your vote and a review if you liked this work" - The author wrote, with hopeful eyes, waiting for your response. - "Thank you!"

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GigiBlack
GigiBlackLv12

I am so glad that there is a kingdom building story that actually revolves around kingdom building and ain't just there for a tag. I'm already obsessed with whats already out. Can't wait for the future chapters. Thx Author for making this

2yr
kanekiUchiha25
kanekiUchiha25Lv4

Author stop trying to add the need to be ethical in the MC's personality, we're not children,we understand that humans are selfish and are driven by ambition,cause at this point it's almost as tho you try label everyone the MC goes up against as 'evil',no is evil,people just have conflicting interests,other than this there's not much to complain about,keep up the good work💯

1yr
Slxxpy
SlxxpyLv13

This review is only 7 chaptors in and this definitely has good potential. Keep up the good work Author-san

2yr
Serendipityy
SerendipityyLv2

For god's sake author please remain in medieval setting, don't bring any Advance modern tech into his kingdom. Show us the plot where MC building his kingdom glory with the current resource and good management 😍😍😍 Letsgoooo

1yr
Motman_69
Motman_69Lv4

Why have you made such a novel pay to view when it has less than 100 chapters and inconsistent releases This perfectly encompasses everything wrong with this app

2yr
Hushparadox
HushparadoxLv15

I will leave this review for now and make changes later on. I just want to encourage more authors/writers to make more kingdom building novels and also contribute to get this novel some what attention to a larger audiences.

2yr
AntiHarem
AntiHaremLv13

We. Need. More! Finally some good kingdom building

1yr
Sculp
SculpLv12

thanks for the effort author-san keep it up moreeeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeeeeee moreeeeeeee

4yr
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