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SnowPenguin
SnowPenguinLv34yr
2020-09-26 05:38

The story is well written with good pacing throughout with an interesting premise and awesome characters, who, at times, do get a little hazy, but overall, the story's good.

The Enigma of the V

Jonkohrr
4.6
141 Chs

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Jonkohrr
JonkohrrAuthor

Thanks for the review What do you mean by hazy characters though

4yr
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AxlSLL
AxlSLLLv2

The story advances smoothly pleasing. Your writing style is simple yet effective. The characters are decently crafted and the setting has that magical feeling that you can always expect but not always get in this genre. However, the way the narrator works is confusing and some might find it tiresome. It acts like it's in the Third-Person most of the time but sometimes it's like a First-Person. The way it talks to the reader can also be just, "weird". Some grammar mistakes but nothing that kills the experience. Try fixing the way you mix the grammatical tenses. And please get rid of those dialogues in the script format: A: Hi. B: Hello. They are tedious to read and limit creativity, especially the way you inconsistently switch between them and the standard quotation marks. Otherwise, it's a solid, light-hearted work. Keep improving it and don't stop.

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iam_adh
iam_adhLv2

I've only read up to fourteen chapters, but so far it seems good. Not going to lie, when I read the first couple of sentences, it honestly was a turn off for me. I blame every other novel where they use the reincarnation trope and make the whole genre trash. However, this story surprised me and made me want to know more. I love where it's going so far, and I hope the author receives the attention it deserves for this story.

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Rathowm
RathowmLv1

The story flows wonderfully. The characters are very likable and comedic. The authors use of language is excellent and the world built around these characters is very interesting. Great action scenes, a very fun read. Keep it up for sure

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WandererMonk
WandererMonkLv11

The story is very smooth flowing and easy to read. Loved the beginning. The chemistry of the main character with the others feels nice and convincing. Will have to wait and see about the world-building aspects. The plot seems deep. Nice work bro

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Stephanie_Kuyucu
Stephanie_KuyucuLv1

With a solid development of the main character and convincing backstory, this story begins convincingly. Well done! I good read! Especially as it is fantasy based!

3yr
Pixiepiu
PixiepiuLv12

A story is full of action and comedy. You have adapted each character very adequately and the dialogue of each character suits everyone well. The world background is very well contrived. I like the story very much especially 'Meg' Legend's best partner, I felt (hehehe). I thought it would be more fun if you didn't write every chapter as a conversation [solely my thinking]. Maybe others will like it the way you wrote it. Good luck in the future.

3yr
yao_yao
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_Kaitlin_Lv5

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Jonkohrr
JonkohrrAuthor

I've really enjoyed writing this story! If you like fantasy, mystery and a hint of comedy, this is definitely for you... It's the greatest unintentional adventure with repercussions that go above and beyond dimensions! There is a main character that we follow from the beginning, but several have a protagonist role (giving you a chance to love or hate them, to choose your favorites as well!). I appreciate all your reviews! I'd also love to encourage you to comment on the chapters as well... it helps motivate me to keep going!

4yr
whiteribbon27
whiteribbon27Lv10

A very good story, I for one love martial arts and adventure. The grammar is very good and characters are interesting, the plot as well. Everything is very good. Good Job 💯 don't lose the motivation to write I'm cheering you on. 💯

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