Review Detail of zachery_chase in The Demon Monarch System
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Your writing is really good, and you can tell how much thought you place into your writing. However, in my opinion that is hurting your character devolpment and world understanding. I have read many cultivation novels and try to Understand the details of how they cultivate. You have made his cultivation eo complicted that I do not really understand hOw his strength grows or what he is supposed to be doing to get stonger. Ever since He has been figuring it out on his own it is like a ignorant child who is confusing and doesn’t know what he is doing. I am Starting to dislike the story because it is got too much going on with Unclear explanations. You have a good theme, character, and setting you have just overcomlicated it and are making hard to read. Sorry i am trying to be constructive in this comment and hope you acctually read it and get what I mean by it because at this rate I do not know if I will continue to read. P.S. I think most of my confusion comes from you have two different cultivation systems. 1 being the MC’s and 2 being everyone else. this is nice idea but I think Without the archaic demon to act as a omniscient teacher everything has blended and is not working.
The Demon Monarch System
Syphiinz
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Understood, but at the basis, his cultivation is quite simple. He simply feeds on any and all energy and turns it into his own, Demonic Anima. While reading this part of the book, you have to realize that this isn't the world he is meant to be in. As a result, the system has yet to truly unlock itself. As of right now, Astarat only serves one purpose to Apollo, once that is accomplished everything picks up. Also, this isn't a cultivation novel. It's a fantasy novel and goes through different world settings; there'll be Astarat, the Nihilistic Rings and another world. So, the cultivation isn't what really matters, it is the MC's journey of demon hood. Nevertheless, one thing remains the same, the Monarch conquers.
So im reading this and you say this isnt a cultivation novel but thats an outright lie. You spend sooooo much every chapter needlessly detailing the exact specifics of sin, how it is used, the energies, the forms they take, how he needs to use them, how they enter his body and all of these other total minor details that are so unnecessary for even regular cultivation novels. You’re so in the weeds and deep into the details for his cultivation process its absolutely absurd. I skim past all lf the bracket info because you just ramble on and on when it comes to his cultivation for several chapters. You’ve spent entire chapters on single portions of him leveling up to major realms (Zul warrior realm level up), and so many others. its honestly crazy for you to make the stateMent that its not a cultivation novel. As a side note, i wish you wete being honest because if it was less of a cultivation novel id be wnjoying it more. im at 113 and so bored with the endless descriptions on his cultivation progress. I want more action and its really hard to keep reading when you could just simplify his process so much more.
Syphiinz:Understood, but at the basis, his cultivation is quite simple. He simply feeds on any and all energy and turns it into his own, Demonic Anima. While reading this part of the book, you have to realize that this isn't the world he is meant to be in. As a result, the system has yet to truly unlock itself. As of right now, Astarat only serves one purpose to Apollo, once that is accomplished everything picks up. Also, this isn't a cultivation novel. It's a fantasy novel and goes through different world settings; there'll be Astarat, the Nihilistic Rings and another world. So, the cultivation isn't what really matters, it is the MC's journey of demon hood. Nevertheless, one thing remains the same, the Monarch conquers.
JPNovelFan:So im reading this and you say this isnt a cultivation novel but thats an outright lie. You spend sooooo much every chapter needlessly detailing the exact specifics of sin, how it is used, the energies, the forms they take, how he needs to use them, how they enter his body and all of these other total minor details that are so unnecessary for even regular cultivation novels. You’re so in the weeds and deep into the details for his cultivation process its absolutely absurd. I skim past all lf the bracket info because you just ramble on and on when it comes to his cultivation for several chapters. You’ve spent entire chapters on single portions of him leveling up to major realms (Zul warrior realm level up), and so many others. its honestly crazy for you to make the stateMent that its not a cultivation novel. As a side note, i wish you wete being honest because if it was less of a cultivation novel id be wnjoying it more. im at 113 and so bored with the endless descriptions on his cultivation progress. I want more action and its really hard to keep reading when you could just simplify his process so much more.
JPNovelFan:So im reading this and you say this isnt a cultivation novel but thats an outright lie. You spend sooooo much every chapter needlessly detailing the exact specifics of sin, how it is used, the energies, the forms they take, how he needs to use them, how they enter his body and all of these other total minor details that are so unnecessary for even regular cultivation novels. You’re so in the weeds and deep into the details for his cultivation process its absolutely absurd. I skim past all lf the bracket info because you just ramble on and on when it comes to his cultivation for several chapters. You’ve spent entire chapters on single portions of him leveling up to major realms (Zul warrior realm level up), and so many others. its honestly crazy for you to make the stateMent that its not a cultivation novel. As a side note, i wish you wete being honest because if it was less of a cultivation novel id be wnjoying it more. im at 113 and so bored with the endless descriptions on his cultivation progress. I want more action and its really hard to keep reading when you could just simplify his process so much more.
Yea i ended up dropping this novel shortly after this comment i had left. it eas too frustrating and boring to read. Barely any progress at all with some things. being so deep in the weeds on the cultivation was such a bore to read. i moved on.
JSKOPOP:And for the zul part i agree ngl