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WHAT_NO_MONEY
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This novel is overall pretty high tier in comparison to most fan-fics. The author has the MC's personality planned from the get go and although the author is unnecessarily perfectionistic it's still nice to see he cares about his writing and characters. The story is well paced and mainly focuses on the MC's point of view with there being some other characters POVs sprinkled in between. And although usually ot would be to early for such a thing the author seems to make it work. But overall greatest feature has to be that the author has a vision and a basic outline for how he wants the novel to progress, and combined with his obvious passion, which shines through in his writing, creates a story that is as enthralling as it is excellently crafted.

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A few things. Im in no way using this as an excuse but I'm a relatively new writer so if I fudge up in places then it's simply a learning experience for me. How exactly do you think are they supposed to act? A full on explosion and chaos ensuing? Panic? Insanity? I tried to portray it on how I think they'd act which, of course, could just as easily be wrong. I do agree that they may have acted too calmly but I did that for a reason. I'm merely a decent writer at best so bare with me........or drop it if you wish

amaturewriter:is it good? I kinda stopped after they find out the MC is from another world and their reaction. it dosnt make sense. they act as though he from another land/country rather than a different world. their entire reality got fked and they dont react to it, they just accept it. so yah, could ya tell? spoilers are fine
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is it good? I kinda stopped after they find out the MC is from another world and their reaction. it dosnt make sense. they act as though he from another land/country rather than a different world. their entire reality got fked and they dont react to it, they just accept it. so yah, could ya tell? spoilers are fine

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Hmm, well imo the fact I have kept in in my library despite trying to stop reading novels says enough to be honest. Not much has occurred in terms of plot, but I guess compared to other novels where he drops the bomb and everyone is fine with it, it's quite obvious the author is not going to allow it to be a minor plot point and is very likely going to a very pivotal plot point and will drag the MC into a political storm, forcing the author to go into uncharted territory. But as for what I have seen the pacing is ,although slow, apt for the story. The characters are realistically built and the author spends a lot of time trying to understand and interpret the characters. And he is slowly building the world and the characters around the MC at the minute. But I imagine the pace is going to change very quickly with Danzo in the background and the other nations spies. I think the first ten chapters or so is the calm before the storm if anything and the author is using it to build the story before shit hits the fan. But imo it's probably one of the best ff atm.

amaturewriter:is it good? I kinda stopped after they find out the MC is from another world and their reaction. it dosnt make sense. they act as though he from another land/country rather than a different world. their entire reality got fked and they dont react to it, they just accept it. so yah, could ya tell? spoilers are fine
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I think there reactions are just not being told, or are just processing the news and deciding how to progress. I imagine in the background a lot of politics is going on, especially after by just disclosing food he has already made such a large impact on the village.

amaturewriter:is it good? I kinda stopped after they find out the MC is from another world and their reaction. it dosnt make sense. they act as though he from another land/country rather than a different world. their entire reality got fked and they dont react to it, they just accept it. so yah, could ya tell? spoilers are fine
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thank you.

WHAT_NO_MONEY:Hmm, well imo the fact I have kept in in my library despite trying to stop reading novels says enough to be honest. Not much has occurred in terms of plot, but I guess compared to other novels where he drops the bomb and everyone is fine with it, it's quite obvious the author is not going to allow it to be a minor plot point and is very likely going to a very pivotal plot point and will drag the MC into a political storm, forcing the author to go into uncharted territory. But as for what I have seen the pacing is ,although slow, apt for the story. The characters are realistically built and the author spends a lot of time trying to understand and interpret the characters. And he is slowly building the world and the characters around the MC at the minute. But I imagine the pace is going to change very quickly with Danzo in the background and the other nations spies. I think the first ten chapters or so is the calm before the storm if anything and the author is using it to build the story before shit hits the fan. But imo it's probably one of the best ff atm.
amaturewriter
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panic, and high security. like trap MC and learn from him or kill. or something along those lines, definitely not allowing him to wonder around or something, forget that, they accepted the fact that he is from another reality just like that. as I said in my previous comment, ur characters act as though they found out MC came from a different continent rather than world. I dropped, I didnt like the characters reactions, or the happy world. I mean come on man.. they'd torture or at least imprison someone who came from another country for months, for the MC they should do more. who would allow such knowledge all wondering around? The MC even if he never studied still has ' otherworldly ' knowledge And the fact they gave MC free will is just ridiculous to me. [ I mean minato talking about jutsu with him? really? even after knowing he is from another world. That just made me give up...] fiction is fiction but a little realism is always needed [for me ] so yah...good luck with ur writing but its not for me

AlphaOmegaDelta:A few things. Im in no way using this as an excuse but I'm a relatively new writer so if I fudge up in places then it's simply a learning experience for me. How exactly do you think are they supposed to act? A full on explosion and chaos ensuing? Panic? Insanity? I tried to portray it on how I think they'd act which, of course, could just as easily be wrong. I do agree that they may have acted too calmly but I did that for a reason. I'm merely a decent writer at best so bare with me........or drop it if you wish