seriously from the way you have written it ,it sounds like your mc was killed by the summoning, but he doesn't bat an eyelid. he then finds out that the "heroes " summoned are dropping like flies again barely a flicker of concern,drugged and basically raped, no worries. the whole time he just does whatever he's told. You cannot immerse your readers in your story if the characters reactions and behaviour are not believable, 5 chapters and I already could not continue .
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