Review Detail of StoryfortheAges in Reborn As A Villain

Great premise, certainly a first for me in this platform! Wonderfully done to make you feel for the MC, not too much and not too little. Character's are mostly fine, although the whole conflict between the MC and the royalties really did sell me on the whole thing. Great descriptions and certainly a nice flow of writing, a style which I can day I like. Now onto things that could be improved: 1) Usage of long paragraphs really need some re-editing. Don't overuse them, make it so that when they do come, they come with am impact. Having more than one every now and then makes it hard to follow. 2) You make the narrator as being its own character... Now this, is a bold move. Not to say it's necessarily a bad thing, but it certainly come off as jarring at first. Maybe that's one thing you can tinker about. But anyways, that's mostly what I got from these first five chapters. Solid start, now it's all up to you to follow up. Just do your thing, and keep on striving for greatness.