Review Detail of Xxxxxxxxxxx024 in Zhoro's Universe:Loose Screws

I noticed a lot of grammatical errors when reading, they reduced as chapters went on but they are still there. There was a bit of tautology in the first few chapters and latter chapters as well, which was uncalled for. For inner thoughts and characters dialogue, the way you used them affected the flow of the story in some areas. Can't say anymore since the book isn't completed and I don't get the whole picture.