Review Detail of Wolfgirl1215 in Immortal Bastard's Return

A good story. It has a good flow to it, and is also reasonably fast paced which is nice. I like how well the protagonist is developed, there is a nice amount of backstory, and his motives and grievances are set out very clearly. It certainly helps the reader connect with them more. The writing is of good quality, though there is the occassional tense change of grammatical error, but its not generally enough to ruin the reading experince. The world building aspect is good, I like how its built up from the beginning, which gives you a really clear picture of what you are going into. I'd say there are a few times when reading I thought: is that part necessary? Or maybe would have liked to see a bit more emphasis on certain events, but all in all, nice work.