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NorthStarLv124yr
2020-09-25 17:57

Thanks Author for this story. I’m up till chapter 20 but would like to post my review still. 1. Quite a unique writing style to deliver the feelings in the begining on Mason. Conversations that internalised her thoughts and perception of others and how she felt towards cole thereafter. So the ability to draw the characters and thoughts are vividly described through conversations 2. The slow built up of the story is good in terms of how Ly and cole feels about each other and him bringing her back to his place on the first date to know his family - interesting way to let her know him better - good choice. 3. The curiosity and tension when Mason and Ly bumped into Mason in the lift or when Ly had to choose between Cole and trivia in the game leaving Cole feeling left out and him translating that into his actions for her eg holding her hands tighter is portrayed effectively All in all easy read - enjoyed the little things that happen - day in a life surrounding Ly and Cole - look foward to seeing how they will go on from here. Keep up the good work, there are some typo in spacing and punctuations in earlier chapter (small matter that can be corrected) but other than that good read! 👍

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Thank you so much for the review.. I'll surely edit all the typos and spacing in the first few chapters.

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Thank you so much for the review.. I'll surely edit all the typos and spacing in the first few chapters.

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Welcome

shortcke:Thank you so much for the review.. I'll surely edit all the typos and spacing in the first few chapters.
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