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AvidfanLv134yr
2020-09-24 20:54

I am still in the early chapters but I'm a fan of the author first book since the very start. The story has a good flow if you are following the author in the past. So terms of writing quality, stability, story development, character design and world background, it is going to be awesome. The real story actually starts at Chapter 6 (I feel) and please give the story a chance till until then and the story will be even more exciting. I wish Gray has a chinese name:X

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JKaiya
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Although the descriptions were kind of basic, the story looked a little good until the FL was introduced. The story then became a hero saving the princess. The MC then became a r3tard idiot which constrasts from what was described of him before. He literally becomes a child that constantly asks her to marry him and talks childishly while he gives her everything in his possession. He literally lost everything for all his years of work and has zero emotion other than him wanting to marry her. Then later MC shows girl his secret treasure that he found with his detecting instinct ability that he literally put earlier on how careful he must be to hide it as it would bring the death of him, flew out the window. Only thing that stayed was his ability to make people lose track of him so no1 will find his die hard love. Once the woman was healed enough to fight the weak animals she didnt so it gives more time for mc to shine. Also once she finds his treasure she starts actively stealing it, then he offers her it and she "hesitates" when she was already stealing it with her cultivation? What? Also once MC returns hurt she starts showing that she is interested in him. Ofoej3nfo9rb3 The romance in this novel could be compared to most harem novels. I wouldnt even be surprised if it does become one. I gave up on the story once this annoying torture of love filler lasted for more than 10 chaps, judging from that and the chase scene, it seems there will be a lot of filler in this novel. I only rated this above 3 stars because of me being interested in first few chaps and how his ability will turn out. Lastly if author is reading this and actually cares about suggestions, only suggestions I have is to try and plan out your book more before writing it as it is hard to change. It sort of feels that each chapter is improvised making the filler a lot. Also try looking at synonyms possibly as I think some of the non landscape descriptions you did couldve been better, especially the ones related to characters. For example emotions. Also, theres only 4 revs and all high, so I wouldnt be surprised if your one of those authors that delete reviews, so if you do I'll be back :)

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