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Kirbyisgreen
KirbyisgreenAuthor4yr
2020-09-02 10:11

This is the author. This is my second novel. It is my take on a xuanhuan adventure, weak-to-strong, poor-to-rich epic tale. It will be a serious novel and I want to explore my own story line ideas instead of repeating the same tired cliches in the genre. The MC will have an OP cheat power but it is all completely enclosed within the world. Romance will be emphasized, as well as harem, but the harem won't be too big. Max will be three or four. I am also aiming for major story arcs that have a beginning/middle/end and can be satisfactory stories in their own right. It won't be an endless treadmill like other webnovels. My aim is to have story arcs around 100 chapters in length and perhaps seven arcs.

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MrFalan
MrFalanLv14

r18?

Apocalypse_2ndLife
Apocalypse_2ndLifeLv3

why did u stop ;_;

Kirbyisgreen
KirbyisgreenAuthor

I am finished with book 1 of this novel at 100 chaps. I am currently revising the all of the chapters starting from chapter 1. I am fixing some parts i don't like, removing others, and also adding chapters in some places. Pretty big overhaul and not just grammar fixes. I think if that process goes well, I may re-release TTK and then see if I want to continue writing book 2.

Apocalypse_2ndLife:why did u stop ;_;
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JKaiya
JKaiyaLv4

Although the descriptions were kind of basic, the story looked a little good until the FL was introduced. The story then became a hero saving the princess. The MC then became a r3tard idiot which constrasts from what was described of him before. He literally becomes a child that constantly asks her to marry him and talks childishly while he gives her everything in his possession. He literally lost everything for all his years of work and has zero emotion other than him wanting to marry her. Then later MC shows girl his secret treasure that he found with his detecting instinct ability that he literally put earlier on how careful he must be to hide it as it would bring the death of him, flew out the window. Only thing that stayed was his ability to make people lose track of him so no1 will find his die hard love. Once the woman was healed enough to fight the weak animals she didnt so it gives more time for mc to shine. Also once she finds his treasure she starts actively stealing it, then he offers her it and she "hesitates" when she was already stealing it with her cultivation? What? Also once MC returns hurt she starts showing that she is interested in him. Ofoej3nfo9rb3 The romance in this novel could be compared to most harem novels. I wouldnt even be surprised if it does become one. I gave up on the story once this annoying torture of love filler lasted for more than 10 chaps, judging from that and the chase scene, it seems there will be a lot of filler in this novel. I only rated this above 3 stars because of me being interested in first few chaps and how his ability will turn out. Lastly if author is reading this and actually cares about suggestions, only suggestions I have is to try and plan out your book more before writing it as it is hard to change. It sort of feels that each chapter is improvised making the filler a lot. Also try looking at synonyms possibly as I think some of the non landscape descriptions you did couldve been better, especially the ones related to characters. For example emotions. Also, theres only 4 revs and all high, so I wouldnt be surprised if your one of those authors that delete reviews, so if you do I'll be back :)

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