This novel is one of those where the MC gets a system not to power-up themselves but to run a business. I personally really like this kind of novels, so it's interesting to read. So far there are only 4 chapters so I guess the shop would become more and more popular overtime. A few suggestions I wanted to give based on my personal opinion (author you can ignore these if you want since they are just my opinions) Do a bit more world building, there are certain things I was able to imagine on my own but also things that I couldn't create a mental image of. One such thing is the shop: there is a transformation but the reader doesn't get to know much about how it looks now compared to before. I'd recommend checking out Black Tech Internet Cafe or some other similar novels to get inspiration on how to describe the changes. From the general writing perspective I'd suggest avoiding repetitive use of words such as realized and shabby, and look for some synonyms. The plot is a bit fast but I don't mind that too much. Overall it's a very nice novel. I hope Lin Fan's sister isn't crazy and the shop grows well. Keep working hard!
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