The writing quality is pretty good, and ledgable, but the plot leaves is all over the place. The speed of updates to the novel has a good pase.Why I think this is not good. First going to 3 diffrent places (DxD, some magic world with a dungeon, digital world) within the span of 20 something chapters makes the plot too confusing. Second the characters back story is just so confusing he wants revenge but the MC feels like he is lacking a personality with no character growth the character dose not feel genuine at all. Third this story is mainly driven by so many cliches; SPOILER: Issie mom becomes pregnant, 'THE WHITE KNIGHT' theme character, all girls are attracted to him, Batman esc. back story... It not bad to write with these cliches there is just no spacing in between plots ther needs to be more detial, and needs to be fleshed out more. Four if you are not writing a character that is not going to have a harem don't start him off in a world that is basically softcore p*** with fan service characters. Five everything seems too forced, and the MC feel fake and bland. To the author your writing is good and you do have talent, but what do I know I've never written a story anyways I digress you should keep your character in one world to start off with and have him interact with the main characters of said plot, and whenever there is down time in between the first world plot you should go to another or just finish off the entire world events before moving to the next world. These are just my thoughts, and you can take them with a grain of salt, but in my opinion you should rewrite right before you went to that dungeon world, and stay in DxD.
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