Great Character Development! I'd like to focus more on the fact that the main character is basically a really dark Captain America who's moral compass leans on vengeance rather than justice and honor, which could later be understood with how horribly he is treated. Overall the grammar and story structure is okay, could use a bit of improvement. One advice I can give though is: allow your character a chance of redemption. Keep up the good work, Author!!!
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LIKE"With great power comes great responsibility." right? It could be that Jay, having become the man with the greatest power in the room, realizes how he had become what he so hates after exacting revenge on the bullies. And so yadayada, But you can also choose the fallen route where he relishes in his newfound power and proceeds to go against the world like Killmoger in Black Panther. The choice is yours, my friend! Keep writing.
Gaure:"With great power comes great responsibility." right? It could be that Jay, having become the man with the greatest power in the room, realizes how he had become what he so hates after exacting revenge on the bullies. And so yadayada, But you can also choose the fallen route where he relishes in his newfound power and proceeds to go against the world like Killmoger in Black Panther. The choice is yours, my friend! Keep writing.