Review Detail of Drakonous in Man Made Demon

An overall good story that suffers from some grammar errors, mostly punctuations. The characters, Jay in particular, is written well; you can feel his misery and anger shimmering underneath, waiting to just erupt. Story development however is a bit cliched, what with the ring and a system being there. I do like that there's also some really interesting backstory going on with the MC. How his mother disappeared (is she in another world too? 🤔), the moment where he comes to peace with the hallucination of his father (that convo in the latest chapter was good), and the dark thoughts that constantly passes through his mind; it's all very human. That said, the story hasn't developed enough for me to accurately say how good it is, but I'm confident that the author is going to do it well. One thing that bothered me though is the system. Honestly, I felt like the author could've removed the system entirely, it's way too cliched (hear me out). Just imagine: how different would it feel if he was just thrust into the new world without any guide. Then, a voice starts whispering in his head, telling him the things the system said in the novel (like how to kill those snake leeches or how strong those inhabitants were). It would be a lot more interesting as then you'd have the MC constantly asking himself, "Who's talking? Am I going crazy? Schizophrenic? Do I have another personality? Or is this the ring talking? How do I, or it, know all of this? Why am I getting stronger the more I kill? Is it just the satisfaction I feel, or is the ring making me stronger?". That would've brought a more mysterious aspect to the story as opposed to the trope, "Oh, there's a system, Google Sensei!". Sorry, it's just that there's way too many of those and they're soo game like and unrealistic. And tiring. Anyways, that's me ranting, ignore it. The story is good and give it a read. Me, I'll be waiting for more chapters before I binge read.