(Ah i see, i only read the first chapter). You might've left unclarity at some point in a paragraph but everything is good. Their dialogue is accurate tho i think you should let the readers know what kind of voice they have so we can fully imagine it(just saying). Your first chapter has the ability to pull the readers into reading the next chapter since you left a cliffhanger and that's pretty great!
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