Just to review this: I'm sure this will be a fantastic story starting from so many questions about what is happening. However, I think you need to focus on the 'hooks' of each chapter cause personally, it doesn't make me want to go to the next page. But you have a great talent for wording and divisions of phrases that might have an impact on the readers, and for also building tensions. Good luck, author! rooting for you

Laughing, he said* be mindful of the correct placement of punctuation

Thank you! Your support really motivated me to continue writing, I hope this book was to your satisfaction

thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed reading it

thank you so kuch!

Hi author, I think your book has great potential, your story seems to be interesting and it just piques our interest, yknow. Although your book is really commendable, I think you should be posting chapters as often as you could. It drives my interest away, as a reader. That's the only downside of this book. Anyway, I'm wishing you a fast pace and good luck! Regards, Glenstonx

Hi author, You had a great start, it just needs to be consistent. I read some minor errors but it doesn't reel me out from the story. Clarify some scenes and it'll be perfect! Wishing your book good luck! Regards, Glenstonx

Hi author! Your work was great! hats off to you, author! I was amazed at how you used italicized and bold fonts for separating the narration from the thoughts or events in the story. The story itself is quite interesting, hardly find any flaw. I hope you continue updating constantly! Your work has great potential, so keep going! Regards, Glenstonx

Thank you!

Thanks!

Hi author, Upon reading your work, due to having few chapters at the current time, I have trouble reviewing this work since I have yet to see the plotline of the book, few grammatical errors here and there and I hope you correct them soon. I think it would be best if you update every day so that your readers will keep track of your book. Wishing you a stroke of good luck! Regards, Glenstonx

Hi author! I read your book, I was amazed by your writing style and the way you describe your world through kinda like video game style(?) and some things are just vivid to imagine, it is fantastic! Your book will get me to like fantasy more and more. Hope there are more updates! Regards, Glenstonx

HI author, when I read your work, I was curious about the plotline, how will it be different than the cinderella story and I hope you would make great use of twisting some plot points for your benefits and overall, it was nice. Just looking forward to your next updates! Regards, Glenstonx

Hi author, I read your work, and it was somehow relatable and it was sad, at some point. I was amazed that you can make a story like this, I hope the Mc can find its happiness soon, please make a good ending for this one, I hope you would. Regards, Glenstonx

Hi author! Your story really got me hooked! The way you described some scenes were awesome. I'm hoping the plotline will be incredible, I wanna see it till the end! I almost couldn't see any flaw since you did a great job. Be consistent in your work and collecting profound words that will match the actions to keep us going and you have my 20000% attention. Best of luck! Regards, Glenstonx

Thank you for the review, and you have my late condolence. Be strong!

Hi author, Upon reading your work, I was astonished to read fresh words and spice to your writing however, please be mindful of the grammatical errors as well as spelling. Re-check your draft and correct them. I see that this work of yours is really interesting and how you play with words are really commendable. I also noticed that your chapter name is not catching my attention, I would recommend if you would name them base on the chapter's main topic/event. The way you built the world was great too, and I'm looking forward for reading more of what's in your world. Please continue updating and Goodluck. Regards, Glenstonx

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*switch *bus' *slum**

are you sure that's not OCD?