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Siegfried_Shepherd
Siegfried_ShepherdLv12yr
2022-02-22 22:18

The MC, Is bad like really bad there is absolutely no reason for him to be the MC. He's not a strategist, he's not a sly profiteer, he's not charismatic. He's just a normal dude. That might sound good but no, It's really not because every time there's a problem he doesn't have the foggiest idea on how to fix it and walks around like a moron asking everyone how to fix it. When your going to write a novel from someone's perspective the novel will get boring if the MC is boring or stupid or just generally way less competent than his advisors at everything he's not good at anything. I understand not wanting your MC to be a garysue but making him boring with nothing he's good at is not the answer to a garysue, this novel would be a 5/5 for me if the MC was special in anyway, everything but the mc is done exemplary well the author clearly took his time to create this world and it shows but the MC for me takes it down to a three.....................................

Viscount's Rise

Darkwood
4.6
269 Chs

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Maiykel
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Friendly advice. You should change the cover photo of the book. The story is great I love it but to attract others you should have a good cover

4yr

Darkwood
DarkwoodAuthor

Well, I'm the author so what did you expect me to rate my won novel? Gotta help my own stats, am I right? I am right, don't question it. Either way, I hope that you enjoy my story!

4yr
Thana
ThanaLv13

Good story line so far. Hope the author doesnt drop the story. ..............................................................................

4yr
DF_Griffin
DF_GriffinLv11

The story appears to be a realistic quasi-medieval setting. If there are fantasy parts, that has not come across by Chapter 12. It involves some Noble politics discussions (though nothing too heavy), domain-level building (probably will touch settlement building at a high-level as the MC runs a Viscountcy with 3 villages and a Castle right now), and depending upon direction of development it could touch Kingdom vs Kingdom conflict, inter-Kingdom conflict, and/or both. Combat/Action has all been small skirmish level and social/political by Chapter 12. However, as stated above the story may develop into something with battles depending on plot direction. If you are expecting lots of action, the story might seem a bit slow. However, outside of the expectations of that type of person the pacing is quite good. As the story is always moving forward, and the MC is not OP nor has any special powers/luck that solves their problems instantly. As stated earlier this is a very realistic type novel so problems are solved incrementally over time. There are a lot of potential plot points already (i.e. by Chapter 12), so it will be interesting which get developed fleshed out. Which I mentioned in this 1st paragraph could drastically change the direction/what we see in the novel.

4yr
darktone
darktoneLv12

I've read every chapter so far it's a great book one of the best on this app I hope it stays free and it needs a better cover to attract more people other than the cover nothing is wrong with it

3yr
Hussain_Jama
Hussain_JamaLv10

Best bOOk around everyone dont miss out cause your stupid and read this beauty. Im Very tierd Of the bullcrap gamIng novels everYwhere on this site.

4yr
Gunner146
Gunner146Lv14

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Lazybeep
LazybeepLv10

Author has done in job building the story up without taking any shortcut. Would like to see further development of other characters apart from mc.

3yr
darktone
darktoneLv12

are there gonna be more chapters? if so when I cant wait until more chapters come out you left us all hanging dont make us wait to long please it's a great book and I will continue to vote both of my powerstones into this book

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BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

At chapter 13 so far their are few faults but the faults I would say are major 1 no map for readers reference 2 mc is a Lord yet is too reliant upon his guests help 3 his constant asking about welfare of the girl who isnt a girl but 19 year old woman(not clear) every chapter every 4 or 5 paragraphs he asks how she was. If she was getting better then why would he think to ask after an hour or 2 at most again 4 due to no map not clear layout 5 not clear if mc is a reincarnator or not

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