Review Detail of Brian70707 in Viscount's Rise

Darkwood:Your 1st and 4th points are the same, no map. And having a map takes time and/or money to make. Something that has been partially solved already since it has been a long time since I wrote chapter 13. There is a map in the discord and on the kofi page that I link to at the end of every chapter. Your 2nd point is a fair critique assuming that I intended to make an infallible character not someone who had literally just inherited his land on chapter 1, he will be reliant on those around him. If it is the matter of them being guests that you are critiquing then I can only say we have a difference of opinion on what a flaw is. Your 5th point should not even be a point at all if you have read even the synopsis of the story. No, he is not.

Darkwood:Your 1st and 4th points are the same, no map. And having a map takes time and/or money to make. Something that has been partially solved already since it has been a long time since I wrote chapter 13. There is a map in the discord and on the kofi page that I link to at the end of every chapter. Your 2nd point is a fair critique assuming that I intended to make an infallible character not someone who had literally just inherited his land on chapter 1, he will be reliant on those around him. If it is the matter of them being guests that you are critiquing then I can only say we have a difference of opinion on what a flaw is. Your 5th point should not even be a point at all if you have read even the synopsis of the story. No, he is not.

Darkwood:Your 1st and 4th points are the same, no map. And having a map takes time and/or money to make. Something that has been partially solved already since it has been a long time since I wrote chapter 13. There is a map in the discord and on the kofi page that I link to at the end of every chapter. Your 2nd point is a fair critique assuming that I intended to make an infallible character not someone who had literally just inherited his land on chapter 1, he will be reliant on those around him. If it is the matter of them being guests that you are critiquing then I can only say we have a difference of opinion on what a flaw is. Your 5th point should not even be a point at all if you have read even the synopsis of the story. No, he is not.

Brian70707:Point 1 and 4 aren't the same yes no map but if you use words correctly the reader can still get an idea of the layout of the territory etc

Brian70707:2 he barley kept her doesn't know if she has hidden intentions but still uses her could have had a loyal assistant instead while she proves her intentions What happens when she leaves since he is so reliant upon her

Brian70707:Majority of the novels of mc becoming a Lord they are reincarnated and use certain knowledge for betterment of their territory for example one or more of the following Advanced Weapons (trebuchets ) Alcohol (earn money) Building techniques (better stronger cheaper Teaching ( maths reading writing how it effects society) Boats ( variations) Games ( entertainment mainly in winters, earn money ) Military (modern training techniques) That's why I kept asking if mc is reincarnated

Brian70707:It allows for comparison writing (mc compares what is now to what was in old world) It allows for something outlandish for the mc to seem normal Expansion on text and content Easier to continue the story or explain a conflict One novel I read mc was beside the sea and mountains, so made a chanel for sea water to enter, making hidden salt farms Excess salt he sold Can easily cause conflict Also used resources to make glass, said recipe he put on auction causing a major conflict for powerful parties at least 2 of which where about to attack him so while they fraught over this technology he used his power to develop a strong army to protect and expand his territory from outsiders