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2020-12-11 08:34

Pro: Good grammar, writing quality is very good compared to other novel’s on the site. Con: idot mc. He chooses not to Increase his stats using the system even after being nearly killed multiple times. Granted he does end up using them but he chose to remain weak for a very long time. I do understand having the mc be stupid, Naive, or weak but he has had multiple wake up calls and refuses to answer them. Pro: world design is very good. Especially with the way its shrouded in mystery and everything isnt given to you upfront like many novels on this site Con: thus far side character development has sucked im beginning to wonder why they are even there. I digress im not fully caught up on chaps but thus far instead of caring about characters I either wish for their deaths, especially Erik, Or i’m just plain indefferent about their wellbeing. Pro: despite his shortcomings MC seems human which i really enjoy and some of his actions actually make sense which I really enjoy These are my thoughts thus far and I do apologize if the spelling sucks WN turns of autocorrect on my phone. If anyone thinks in wrong about any of these feel free to reply

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Honestly, ordinarily this work would be at least 4 stars for me. The attention to detail is fantastic as the author seems to notice the little bits about this type of world and using powers that other authors miss. The writing itself is quite superb with the right mix of adjectives, vivid descriptions and no grammatical errors. The pacing of the world is jarred, we learn about the new world insidiously; slowly and in a measured manner for multiple chapters and then all of a sudden, information is flying our way from nowhere. This works for this novel though because it creates suspense and carries the reader along. The immediate flaw of the work is in character interactions, the characters are three-dimensional but in the author's attempt to make them very complex, they often come across as inconsistent, almost in-human. But the biggest flaw and the main reason for my rating is the MC. He is passive, naive and hopelessly reactive. Unlike other MC's who make things happen and take control, the MC lets things happen and only does something when in a tight spot. As a result, he has somehow ended up being a toy for multiple powerful forces due to his sheer stupidity. He feels very half-hearted without a shred of resolve and thinks and acts like 21st century, first-world **** who has yet to stop suckling at his mother's teat. He makes for an immensely frustrating read and has brought me to the brink of dropping this work multiple times. It is rare for such a good quality work to have one character Fuck it all up but somehow the author has managed to achieve that. And I, as a reader, do not know whether to be impressed at the finesse required to achieve such or angry that such a good book has been made sub par by the individual meant to be its linchpin.

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