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LinYang
LinYangLv24yr
2020-08-23 01:04

Overall pretty good. Writing quality was okay; punctuation could use a little work as well as capitalization. I would mainly use more commas to separate phrases. The author has created a vivid and interesting MC, and the story has a cool premise. Keep writing author! Looking forward to seeing you and the story grow!

For the Betterment of the World

deepu_
4.8
9 Chs

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deepu_
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Thank you so much for the review dear

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The male lead seems to be a no care person.. It's only one chapter so can't say anything but will be waiting for more chapter.. I hope he can achieve his goals

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lycheepearlmilktea
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This is a very interesting book! The plot so far is pretty engaging, and I like the way you characterized the characters. I would advise checking on the grammar, though; in places it switches between past and present tense. Great work!

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Beornhardt
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Hey, i read the first four chapters from your work, though it’s still ongoing I can see it’s potential and it was a really good read. Hope you see it to the end and keep up the good work! :))

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Henry_Hyren
Henry_HyrenLv1

The story's eye-catching and most of all, thrilling. The flow is not too slow, and also not too fast. Just the right speed for the readers to enjoy. It's slightly difficult to predict how the plot is going to be because there's only a few chapters, but I see that there's definitely some plots within plots, and with more plots. I'm looking forward for more updates. To improve the novel more, I think that adding commas in between the long and tricky sentences would be a good idea so that the readers could understand more.

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SolAce
SolAceLv3

The story is just starting, so it’s hard to predict how the plot will go and how detailed it could be. But I’d say that the punctuation and grammar does make me confused sometimes. If you need any help, I’ll try to point out some things. Although, don’t get discouraged ! We all start from somewhere, and I think you have a very good world build, which was my weakest point when I first starting writing. So keep up the good work author !

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Omo_Comforts
Omo_ComfortsLv3

I like your story, it is interesting. There are two chapters so it is hard for me to decide the pacing. Overall this story is good. I like it

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LyingCrowPromises
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I like this type of story with detectives, cases, and a spice of supernatural, so this story is right up my alley. The beginning is well written, and I have a good impression of the characters so far. The world background still hasn't been uncovered much, but I think it won't be bad so I'm giving it 5 stars in advance (I have high hopes for the author). The only thing that's bothering me is the writing quality. At most I can say it's average and it's good, but I think it's better to find an editor/proofreader or use a software to help fix some mistakes. That's all. In the end, I DO recommend this story because it will be a good read once it has more chapters.

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JustLikeWriting777
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Ok...I am shocked... Beautifully written by the way. And I absolutely love how realistic and original it is. Overall, you did an amazing job. [img=recommend]

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