Review Detail of TheCheshireJoke in Vampire Diaries: A Slayer Is Born

Your writing is great and you pay attention to the small details, which a lot of authors don’t do as a habit. I don’t know about the update stability, so here, have some free rating. The story development is 4 because it has some element of wish-fulfillment, and to be fair, this is a fanfic which means it is wish-fulfillment. Character design is 3 because of personal bias, however I suggest that you raise his self-esteem in his new life and if you can explain more about the issue of his self-esteem, it can’t be just because he’s average, maybe his father was abusive? World development is 4 because, well it’s a fanfic and it’s 1 chapter only. You gave him an interesting power that you can abuse and make some expansions on it. Another point I want to expand on is the vulnerability and determination of the MC, you made him vulnerable which is really a great way to start a chapter and show the readers that he is a human and he is not invincible. I don’t about his determination, because determination comes from either family, friends, dreams, goals and traumatic experience. e.g. Batman, Superman, Spider-Man, etc. All of them are heroes and you clearly want your MC to be some sort of hero that’s morally right and sometimes vulnerable like Spider-Man. In conclusion you have a great start and some good skills. Hold on to your start and remember to pay great attention to details and emotions of your Characters. Because these two are VERY important to a writer. P.S. Love the idea of a male slayer. Also a female angel?