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amaturewriterLv44yr
2020-08-16 18:16

fk...had a heart attack. Was sad, thought u dropped. Thank god u didnt. really like so far. I am going to support this for the sole reason that I like this FF's ' plot ' Plus reading ur starting chp, that was a another reason...seeing as cannon is fked, I like it....hope u do as u've promised ur bks, I;ve read em [the mutant FF and the BNHA FF]..dont do what u did there here...plenty of reviews explain what u did wrong...ie: a dumb MC in the mutant FF and ur nerfed MC in BNHA [YES U EXPLAINED BUT MC has too much OP **** that was neutered..so yah, dont neuter]..point is, avoid what u did in those FF's here, some of the reviews explained ur faults. suggestion: no dumbass MC, this is akainu so dont look at world like anime, look at it with a some what darker look, rather than in the OG, or like most one piece FF's...like angst **** isnt necessary but dont make it happy and friendly. Smart MC, use intelligence. any romance just build, and no perverted retard. GL **: the pic looks dope..who ever made is an artist..good choice on presentation....

One piece: reincarnated as Akainu(revised)(on hitus)

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