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Pleasedeteme
PleasedetemeLv34yr
2020-08-17 20:58

My initial review.You book has potential I won't say much until much later in the story as it progresses.Just to cheer you back in return. ..............................

WORLD OF WARGROUNDS

SilentMild
4.9
36 Chs

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SilentMild
SilentMildAuthor

Thank you, LordMaximus! Cheers!

4yr
Pleasedeteme
PleasedetemeLv3

Can you asses how my work is going.?

SilentMild:Thank you, LordMaximus! Cheers!
4yr
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SilentMild
SilentMildAuthor

Chapter one needs to be trimmed: descriptions and grammar need improvement 🤗 give yourself a go in reading your chapter one. And I'll read it again after your go signal. The first sentence in your first chapter must be an easy-read.

Pleasedeteme:Can you asses how my work is going.?
4yr
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Pleasedeteme
PleasedetemeLv3

Got it I will fix the first few after the volume finishes.did I do better later chapters or did I flop?

SilentMild:Chapter one needs to be trimmed: descriptions and grammar need improvement 🤗 give yourself a go in reading your chapter one. And I'll read it again after your go signal. The first sentence in your first chapter must be an easy-read.
4yr
1
SilentMild
SilentMildAuthor

I was not able to finish chapter 1, mate. I'll reread it once edited 🍻 But don't worry, writing is all about rewriting. Now go and refine those chapters in to their best version possible. I'll wait for your go signal, and I'll tell you if it's yay or nay

Pleasedeteme:Got it I will fix the first few after the volume finishes.did I do better later chapters or did I flop?
4yr
SilentMild
SilentMildAuthor

I was not able to finish chapter 1, mate. I'll reread it once edited 🍻 But don't worry, writing is all about rewriting. Now go and refine those chapters in to their best version possible. I'll wait for your go signal, and I'll tell you if it's yay or nay

Pleasedeteme:Got it I will fix the first few after the volume finishes.did I do better later chapters or did I flop?
4yr
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