Review Detail of Eking_James in Powered up by karma

I like the idea of the main character fighting back against the rules of their society. It makes for an interesting premise and can go a variety of ways. In the 5 chapters I have read, I felt that the character description were quite devoid of charm and that statement can go for most of what I've read. Emotions aren't shown, but told directly to the reader. (Ex: Liam was angry, Dazzle was shocked, Dazzle was scared, etc.) You want to describe their emotions, not tell them. For example, you could say Liam's blood boiled like lava instead of using the word angry. The text was also very bland at times since the word choices were basic. I recommend a thesaurus to spice up your story. Overall, this novel has a very unique premise and that's the first step to fame. Work on what I said and I can assure you'll gain massive popularity.