Review Detail of jeanpierregerardo in Invincible System in ATG (Hiatus)

After reading until the last chapter, I can only say that I like how it goes, I am not a native of English, so I do not know if the grammar and all that pod of failures that there will be, if like how I progress, not so fast with the force, is not pervert looking for girls like collecting pokemon. - First it has its main point, which is to become strong, it is not like the other "fanfic" where they start with a dominated protagonist, who does not know what to do (those who when they have Op powers, they only use it to have all the beauties in their bed just for fucking). - Since it started until now I like how it goes, it has been slow, but not so slow, it does not get into other people's problems, as other authors do. - You presented "can yue" that is different from other "fanfic" where they don't give it a different approach (as for example in other "Atg" stories, they always put "can yue" only as bait for the protagonist to help her because of its beauty, in passing also so that the protagonist feels good about himself), but in your story, I see that his role is not simple, you are giving it a different approach, where alone it is managing to obtain more power, not one that It is given by the protagonist who would make things easy and without any effort. - I just hope to see how you will treat "xiam quiyue" for treating him badly, I want to see how you put her in her place and make her see that she is not a big deal and that what she does is only because of her selfish satisfaction that she has for her mother , where he hurts the rest of his family that he is already losing with each time he gets more involved in the cultivation that blocks his emotions. - I would put more but it i am lazy xD.