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Dann_GiovanniLv14yr
2020-08-25 12:03

Veiled Saga: Conquest and Domination is a book of fiction written by Suezaro. Though the story follows a particular culture and tradition of a certain country, the author has added his own twists and turns. The book is related to the Philippines, an Asian country. The terms are described well, so no confusion can arise here. The characters are fleshed out, and for that, I would like to compliment the author! Each has their own distinguishable characteristic, making readers fall in love with the characters. Grammar is definitely the major flaw in this novel. Sometimes, phrases ended up being somewhat sentences. There are one line paragraphs that are not meant to be one line, it makes things look like a letter. Next, dialogues are great. Punctuation is superb! Commas and em dashes are used properly. If there is anything the author has to improve, that would be grammar. Have is used for present, and had is used for past. I've noticed some "haves" took the place of "hads" even if the one being referred to is past. Well, that is all I can say! Keep writing!

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Suezaro
SuezaroAuthor

Thanks for your review, I too have noticed this and many had suggested me to have a proofreader and as you can see English is not my main language. Well, I'll work on my flaws hope I can improve them. Thanks again.

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Alright, this is for the prospective readers out there who are interested in giving this book a shot. What I really admired with this book and the author is the creation of his world-building, a lot of things would scale up and gets larger as the book's plot progresses. I think the most striking protagonist is Miguel not Argus, but since both of them seems to be crucial in the development of the whole story, I think what I have interpreted so far is that Miguel and Argus is both the protagonist while there would be a villain that they go against. The latest chapters are foreshadowing this I am currently at Chapter 163. The author is very subtle about it and I think it would be the Aghorans but I wasn't so sure about it yet. About the character development, I can see the growth of Argus by him being taught by Miguel. I like how the Author combines the magical or supernatural elements of this book with the ordinary wars. Culture and traditions play a major aspect in this book. since the author is a Filipino I can say that it is based in the Philippines before the Spanish invasion. The thing that would make you want to keep reading this book is the constant guessing of what would happen next because truthfully, I cannot guess it quite well. There are some syntax and preposition mistakes but that is almost negligible and you can fully immerse yourself with the story if you are not so mindful of those. The potential of this book could've been great, but we know well what is popular right now, systems and cultivation, as of now I can see some signs that magic would also play a key role in the progress of the story. Over-all it is a nice read! Do not be dissuaded just because there are 2 MCs in this book. Well, let me guess Author? Perhaps you are either planning to separate the two or make them merge together because if that is where you plan on making it, that would really be cool!!! Thank you for giving us this book and please continue writing this book, do not drop it! That is all that I want to say, maybe as you give us more chapters I will update my review.

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