Review Detail of HANA_4345 in A Supernatural Apocalypse

So, let's go with the strong points first... The character and world-building in this story are pretty decent. Just as other reviewers have written, it has this light novel type of building which is pretty adequate for the Webnovel platform and readers. What can the author improve? 1. Grammar. (Which the author knows since in ch1 it was mentioned about the grammatical mistakes. I recommend using Grammarly or MS Word to check on those tiny mistakes. If you are writing in 3rd POV remember that most verbs are going to be in the past tense.) 2. Being clearer. I like reading the synopsis, and it took me a few times re-reading it to understand the idea. There's also a lot of redundant sentences. The same goes for the chapters I have read so far. You need to describe so your readers know but prevent being redundant. Try using pronouns. And... that's all. I hope that maybe someday the author will go back and edit the chapters. This story can have a lot of potential with a bit of more polishing.