Review Detail of StoryfortheAges in The Beginning Leads to the End

Very interesting storytelling you've got here! Really, really interesting way of writing! Love the characters and really love the world hinted. Stability of updates seems pretty nice, and overall very neatly made. A few things I think could be improved: 1) Putting the name of the character in every changing of POVs could help the readers from getting lost (as well as some sort of unique symbol like an * or a 《 》 to symbolise the change) 2) If you're using present tense then I'd suggest keep it mostly that for the rest of the story (or at least paragraph).. It's not a mistake you did a lot, but there was some earlier on. That's practically it to be honest... Keep on writing, and keep on doing what you love! May you reach the hearts of your readers!