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2021-07-10 00:21

note- I am a big amateur when it comes to writing reviews. but I will still give it a try. 1. My Favorite part of this novel was the writing quality. I think that the author put a fair amount of work pleasing the readers with his writing capabilities which he absolutely did. 2. As you all may know, the story revolves around a protagonist who got transmigrated into a game that he used to play. and the bad news is that he got put into the body of a person who got NTRed which explains the title. The story revolves a lot about fighting and a lot of cuckolding (not the mc whos doing the cuckolding because he is actually the one getting cucked but ofc its part of the development of the story). one of the key factors on why the novel got such a bad rating is because of how inconsistent the updates and development were. I can clearly understand that some people are just getting mad because of how slow the story is, and that is where the inconsistency comes into role. imo, if you are going to try writing a slow-paced story, I would recommend uploading more chapters per week. 1 chapter per week is not really ideal if you want your story to be highly rated and so on. It may be because the author has some work to do irl and because it is only a hobby but it may have been a bit better to upload a bit more than once per week. (for example villain cultivator, endless path infinite cosmos etc) I actually got a bit confused about the choices of the protagonist considering that he has played the game before and why he did not make use of his knowledge. I mean, if he did not even have knowledge about the game why would we readers even need the 'useless' information? I mean should he not have a bit of an advantage so that he does not start from "scratch"? I wont really pick on the protagonists development because I actually considered the amount of chapters it has unlike those people complaining about why the protagonist is such a wuss and so on. overall it is decent and it couldve had a better, overall "look" to it if it was less slow paced but thumbsup for the author.

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SailusGebel
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Thanks for the review. I agree with the part about inconsistency with development, and sometimes mc choices look weird. As it's my first novel, I messed up quite a lot and wasn't able to write some things properly. As for update stability. I have work, and English isn't my native language. Basically, for 100+ days, I worked two full-time jobs. I was working, and all the time that was left, I used to write and edit, which was like 6-8 hours of writing\editing a day. 100+ days of pure writing\editing time spread across the time of ten months. I can't simply stop working nor cut my free time. I'm already as exhausted as I am. There is visual repetitiveness in the novel. But it's a slice-of-life kind of story. As I wrote those 'repetitive" chapters, I had a somewhat deeper meaning in my mind. As I was writing them, I wasn't able to relax and simply fill-up the length of the chapter. Though I failed in conveying these thoughts, for me(as an author), there wasn't any 'rinse and repeat' chapters. I wasn't able to splurge up the content as most authors do and write fillers. I tried to leave hidden meanings and stuff like that. The stuff that most people skip, like the personal, psychological struggle of the MC. It had a lot of meaning to me. Also, about the 'long hiatus,' I took. I got a long hiatus(it was around two months) because of the covid. I caught the disease myself. And all my family did as well. There was a lot of stuff going on because of this, I won't go into full detail.

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