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Eggy_does_writing
Eggy_does_writingLv24yr
2020-08-27 10:56

System/game stories are not my thing but this was pretty good! Sage is a very relatable character that the audience can easily sympathize with. I like how the author describes actions in this story. The part I didn't like was when the author would put text in [* I don't mind sound effects or noises being written like that but sometimes the author would write stuff like [*busy*]. It doesn't make sense to me and there were also a few grammatical issues. However, the rest of the story was pretty good!

Doomsday Survival System

Rankuza
4.8
32 Chs

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Rankuza
RankuzaAuthor

Thank you for the educating review I will try my best to improve 😃

4yr
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Ysabel_xox
Ysabel_xoxLv4

It have an interesting start, really made me intrigued. I love the sound effects, like I can imagine the sounds in my mind. The chapters are decent long, will not make you bored. Keep up the good work author !👍👍

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Rankuza
RankuzaAuthor

Hello, author here! I have shamelessly given myself a five-star review because I promise you readers won't regret it when you read. So please stick around and read the chapters to better understand the story. Don't forget to please leave comments and reviews, to clearly state your opinions thank you in advance. I will try my best to improve and work harder to keep you readers entertained.(⌒▽⌒)☆

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The_Procrastinator
The_ProcrastinatorLv13

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madskie00017
madskie00017Lv12

I enjoyed the story so far. The writing style is amazing! It surely is something to look forward to. The plot and visualization of the story is really good. This story has so much potential as long as it is written consistently with a good plot and good character development along the way. Please more chapters, Author!! I want some more !!

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Light_ray
Light_rayLv14

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ShininCrazyDiamond
ShininCrazyDiamondLv2

Intriguing plot, I like doomsday stories so I gave it a try. This story has much potential and develops well, good job author, good luck and happy writing.

4yr
Dalexia
DalexiaLv1

The writing style is very detailed and direct. the plot is intriguing and will have you begging to read more. This is a very unique story so far.

4yr
Random_Asian
Random_AsianLv3

Just read the few first chapters, if you keep the current pace I think you should be fine for the future, I hope u get 1 Mil views or something lol

4yr
Ayano_Ann
Ayano_AnnLv2

The story is really good! I love how Sage always looks after his mom and tries to find a way to save her! I hope she will one day wake up and make him happy! And the game theme is the best too! I love it and would recommend it to everyone!

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