Review Detail of Brian70707 in Domination Kingdoms

It's to fast paced to make it a decent story Opening was great as well as relating similarities between Harry Potter and himself. If you continued that for 20/30 chapters of his daily life it would make an impression. Then introducing his grandfather as having worked in a bookshop in his youth before receiving it when the owner retired would make more of an impact. Having major player in technology be a neighbour is weak, could have had it that he bought his first book on computers within that store and regularly visited due to his sentimentality