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Uncle_Sheogorath
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2020-07-29 09:54

Good story I like! There are some(few) spelling mistakes however if you like dark/evil protagonist then this story is for you! For suggestions perhaps add some romance eventually for the mc? I mean who wouldn't want to bone some elves when reborn in a fantasy world? Moreover, it will lighten up the mood and the darker moment of the story. Overall I like it!!

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HolyJoker
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Thanks for showing me the mistakes, I fixed them. I really appreciate this and hope you like the MC. I can't spoil what happens in the future😉... but there will be some love interests. But sadly this won't be harem, due to harems ruining some good stories that I myself used to read. Also for me harems wouldn't work because if the MC has another girl... why wouldn't the girl chat on the MC too? After all that is only logical.🤣

Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

Good! I never said I wanted a harem in the first place(Too much management lol)...However, generally reason for harems are because the males are super-powerful people in the stories e.g ruler/OP power which allows them to live in decadence with their harems, like ancient Chinese emperors etc. Of course, writing a good harem is quite hard so I understand why people avoid it. In terms of cheating, it could only happen in my opinion if the girl is of equal strength compared to her male partner and then him cheating first...however, if she's a weakling compared to him then her cheating would be unlikely as she would know the consequences of cuckolding a powerful character. Anyway, good luck with the story...

HolyJoker:Thanks for showing me the mistakes, I fixed them. I really appreciate this and hope you like the MC. I can't spoil what happens in the future😉... but there will be some love interests. But sadly this won't be harem, due to harems ruining some good stories that I myself used to read. Also for me harems wouldn't work because if the MC has another girl... why wouldn't the girl chat on the MC too? After all that is only logical.🤣
HolyJoker
HolyJokerAuthor

She can do it secretly, as long as the main character doesn't know. After all, I am 100% sure that whomever has ever had a harem, he has been cheated on by his harem behind his back, who did it? Was it with his assistant? Most trusted friend? Or someone else... well it doesn't matter. Harems don't work, at the best scenario you would have the women become jealous of each other and start poisoning and assassinating each-other for the MCs attention... and that is the best case scenario if they still love the MC even due to him having a harem.

Uncle_Sheogorath:Good! I never said I wanted a harem in the first place(Too much management lol)...However, generally reason for harems are because the males are super-powerful people in the stories e.g ruler/OP power which allows them to live in decadence with their harems, like ancient Chinese emperors etc. Of course, writing a good harem is quite hard so I understand why people avoid it. In terms of cheating, it could only happen in my opinion if the girl is of equal strength compared to her male partner and then him cheating first...however, if she's a weakling compared to him then her cheating would be unlikely as she would know the consequences of cuckolding a powerful character. Anyway, good luck with the story...
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

True for huge rivalry between the females.... However cheating is quite another business, the reason is that they would be risking their lives. I mean in ancient china Chinese concubines were protected by eunuchs which kinda stops the whole cuckolding thing to happen, moreover, they would be executed if gotten caught, I doubt the emperor could take the humiliation by keeping them alive. Anyway, that's a weird subject that we're talking about :)

HolyJoker:She can do it secretly, as long as the main character doesn't know. After all, I am 100% sure that whomever has ever had a harem, he has been cheated on by his harem behind his back, who did it? Was it with his assistant? Most trusted friend? Or someone else... well it doesn't matter. Harems don't work, at the best scenario you would have the women become jealous of each other and start poisoning and assassinating each-other for the MCs attention... and that is the best case scenario if they still love the MC even due to him having a harem.
HolyJoker
HolyJokerAuthor

Yeah but... hmmm.. true... but let's reverse the situation then, maybe that will make you see my point of view. A female cultivator that is super strong has made a male harem. Now how to you think the men will react, will everyone of them accept gangbanging her, fu*king her cum stained pu*sy, even after a hundred other guys already did it with her already. ABSOLUTELY NOT they would find an opportunity to cheat no matter what. After all, since when has fear of death made humans avoid something (War, STD, Poison, betrayal... etc) Humanity will always will chase after freedom, and it's different forms. Loyalty is a two way road. Also being in a harem will affect people's (male and female) psyche, thinking that they are worthless and so they search for someone to give them the attention they need/want, he/she will want to feel special, not just one of one hundred other s*x toys. I hope this makes sense to you.

Uncle_Sheogorath:True for huge rivalry between the females.... However cheating is quite another business, the reason is that they would be risking their lives. I mean in ancient china Chinese concubines were protected by eunuchs which kinda stops the whole cuckolding thing to happen, moreover, they would be executed if gotten caught, I doubt the emperor could take the humiliation by keeping them alive. Anyway, that's a weird subject that we're talking about :)
Uncle_Sheogorath
Uncle_SheogorathLv4

True I understand what you mean however in terms of the situation that you have provided women are more submissive than men after all.(Not all of course but more than men definitely) Moreover, some people have weird kinks BDSM etc... In fact, in our own ancient world, such situations where females have many boy toys are quite rare to happen. And males who had many concubines well their lots of those situations... either way, we're both right in my opinion.

HolyJoker:Yeah but... hmmm.. true... but let's reverse the situation then, maybe that will make you see my point of view. A female cultivator that is super strong has made a male harem. Now how to you think the men will react, will everyone of them accept gangbanging her, fu*king her cum stained pu*sy, even after a hundred other guys already did it with her already. ABSOLUTELY NOT they would find an opportunity to cheat no matter what. After all, since when has fear of death made humans avoid something (War, STD, Poison, betrayal... etc) Humanity will always will chase after freedom, and it's different forms. Loyalty is a two way road. Also being in a harem will affect people's (male and female) psyche, thinking that they are worthless and so they search for someone to give them the attention they need/want, he/she will want to feel special, not just one of one hundred other s*x toys. I hope this makes sense to you.
HolyJoker
HolyJokerAuthor

True.🤣👍

Uncle_Sheogorath:True I understand what you mean however in terms of the situation that you have provided women are more submissive than men after all.(Not all of course but more than men definitely) Moreover, some people have weird kinks BDSM etc... In fact, in our own ancient world, such situations where females have many boy toys are quite rare to happen. And males who had many concubines well their lots of those situations... either way, we're both right in my opinion.
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