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R4IN
R4INLv44yr
2020-10-13 02:10

There’s nothing much to complain but if I was going to complain something, it’ll drop like a meteor. I really hate how author designed a character. especially in later part(ch.30) at first, it felt really good because they seemed alive but, at the later part, it gets really boring because he got a bit handsome, almost all the girl he meet falls in him. Also, because there’s just so many new girls appearing, (around 1 per 2-5 chapter.) some of the early girls forgotten and never appeared like a ghost. (by the way, I exxagrated that. some of them appear but some forgotten. like Saki.) Now for the second, why did author made Tadano a main character? I mean, if he were to erase Tadano’s identity of making him maybe currently the most handsome in the world (because 1 look from him made almost all girls in this novel fell for him.) also a downfall of this novel. Well overall, its fun. Maybe.

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Charlottes
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Well...I didn't forget Saki actually it's just I don't have a perfect time to show her in a scene.

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idle_enthusiast
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I think the plot wise is better than your previous work and it is interesting so far. there some part that I think it still can be improved. 1. mc feel like a generic wuxia protagonist. he does many dumbass thinks, like upgrading something to the max like it doesn't matter, think some girl in the series as his own even though he does not even know her yet, provoke whole class, and saying yourself a prodigy is not arrogant but overly stupid what the point provoking teacher, arrogantly said you a prodigy and make a new formula out of nowhere even for anime standard it was over the top, most people will think you weird both in real life and anime. exaggerated flexing maybe your point is for him to gain a surprise point, but he doesn't need to like I say make new equation formula, one side beating a basketball team, if you faintly throwing this kind of events so often it will become dull. some of the interactions with other characters feel like a textbook answer of being an overall nice guy, there a little no his own personality on it and feel forced on the other character. 2.system is as bad as a wuxia-made system, you just gain normal skill by just thinking or desire it is still acceptable but you can make at least he has experienced it beforehand. and upgrade skill albeit normal skill so easy to prodigy level or monster level like point doesn't matter is bad, the mc feel no struggle form the system, he can gain anything And master anything just like that can make the story boring in long run, at least show how expensive or hard to get a prodigy level so is not like seeing people play which cheat code, is fun at first but boring after that. make him struggle to gain something to make it interesting. 3. the detail, many people say detail is not important or is just a fiction, but some case like this it is important. first, he can learn the skill to monsters level but making equation out of nowhere was too exaggerated, the fact that no reference or even mention of what kind is it make it faint and forced. same with a shonen jump, first you need at least know how is work you can just search by googling it doesn't need to be detailed at least show your mc know something, I know most fiction fill with made-up stuff but don't just make stuff that feels false outright, don't try over the top thing like explaining how good your drawing of demon slayer, you can say more detailed or something like that but don't say your detail on characters like tanjirou and nezuko, is showing your mc barely know anything. the detail is important when you make a story about someone of a certain job or fieldwork so you can show that your mc has the characteristic, skill and give the story more spice. like anime about novelist and mangaka, even the important part is their life and interaction their common knowledge on their field make it's more interesting.

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