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Starry_sky
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2020-09-10 04:13

For starter the FL is strong and ML has other purposes than chasing a skirt. The background is really interesting. The major problem I faced is the editing. It is a complex story which has many branches, it is difficult to add them up at the beginning and then the grammar is challege on top of that. This seriously needs editing otherwise I feel this one is going to turn into a story with great potential.

Face of Fate

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Thank you for your feed back. I really appreciate it. I'll definitely work on the editing part.

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