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2020-08-04 20:31

The narrative is well crafted, although it leaves the reader with much to imagine. The characters however, despite being fictional displays real emotions. The story so far is serious minded and intellectual.its a good work. Few punctuation errors and fewer dialogues. I look forward to more chapters.

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Thank you for your kind compliments, appreciate it

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