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Will5010
Will5010Lv143yr
2021-08-04 08:01

This book seems to have the foundations of a great book but is let down by poor writing. if you want to see what I mean I've left comments in the first chapter. another thing is the way speech is handled, having the name after every speech is disjointing. try to build the speech into the sentences. the name after style could then be used for greater effect in confusing fight scenes or when lots of aside characters are talking. Also in general work on the way you express ideas. eg aghh its my alarm is both a unnatural thing to say and disjointing. instead he jolted awake, realizing the dragon roars were in fact his alarm clock. This only an example, there's many ways to do it but this book has a lot of potential if you go back and rewrite it.

Seed Of The Stars

Alanala
4.3
218 Chs

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Alanala
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Im planning on doing a rewrite, but will be releasing that rewrite a loooong time from now! This is my trial run of seed of the stars, and it definitely SUCKED at the beginning due to my poor writing and zero planning. This is going to stay free for a few years minimum before I release the paid light novel. Thank you for stopping by and giving me ideas to improve!

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This is honestly one of the best novels I read, the characters are well made, the world is interesting, I don't have to wait a year for an update ya know the stuff ya want in a web novel. Anyway, I recommend everyone to at least try out this novel cause ya won't regret it.

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In my professional consumer opinion the author did a great job in keeping the novel interesting considering that most other novels have cool training and getting stronger parts but the rest is just dry copy pasted comedy but this one has both interesting during training and none training parts so that you don’t get bored or question if it’s worth reading..... Now that said the novel does have some downsides and that can never be avoided BUT compared to other novels this shines in that it is a very minimal amount instead of you questioning why the mc only has two brain cells to rub together and is somehow smarter than everyone else. All in all I’d say that it is a good read and there were some parts where I couldn’t wait to continue reading

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This fantasy story is written nicely. I found myself thoroughly enjoying it. I was kinda bothered to the symbol you used for quoting instead of a quotation mark or maybe t'was my first time to encounter that. However, the plot is perfectly fit for the chapters. I'm adding it to my collection.

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I am really liking this novel. How we can see the character's thoughts in a limited way. You did that very well. The back and forth between the characters really creates the ******* and builds the scenes for the training and dueling. I am adding this to my collection. Can't wait to read more

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The story is interesting, and I love the way the author portrays the thoughts. The way the plot unfolds, is very exhilarating and full of suspense. This is a must read book, it's already one of my favorites. Good story, good plot good stuff.

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Just a bit "Meh". I find it very difficult to read and a bit boring in its progression.....................,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,,,,,,,.,,.,,.,,.,

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