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HeikyZX
HeikyZXLv34yr
2020-11-21 12:20

I read till chapter 24 and found the plot presented at first interesting and promising, with the characters that appeared with good construction. The problem is when the story fell at the MC's hands and the 'oh-so' great intelligence started. Minor accidents really, stupidly revealing his identity (with the character not relating him to his race even after having just met one herself). Then, as if having to nerf the whatever system of the MC so that he doesn't self-destruct, the author started 'correcting' many things like elements and even the Spirit of the system... Sorry, but I will drop this as I'm already tired of forced development. thanks to the MC 'stupidity'.

Heaven Destroyer

Eternal_Demon
4.4
222 Chs

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Eternal_Demon
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Well, thanks for the review anyway.

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