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Kenrio
KenrioLv112yr
2022-02-09 22:48

a wish fulfilment fic that is extremely frustrating to read. first when mc need something he will gain it using the gacha, second he have many skil but don't ever try to use them to gain money for his poor family and third and worst of all author started giving harem to other guy, I dont care of he give pc character for these other guy but he give amazing waifus to simple side characters

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DaoistNineCircles
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A story with a good concept but meh execution. [>Writing Quality (4/5 Stars)<] - Best part of the novel. Although for OC it would be mediocre, for a fanfic it's not bad. A little dry for my tastes, but overall readable. [>Stability of Updates (4/5 Stars)<] - Not even finished yet so no complaints here, though I did hear that the author focuses more on his other story (the one with that focuses on Deku and friends) so that's a bit disappointing, as I find this one to be better, but oh well. [>Story Development (3/5 Stars)<] - Meh. Although it's a slice of life, it's a little too boring for me. The protagonist never fails at anything he does, and the only lost he's faced thus far was losing a grandmother. I like the idea of Gacha systems and slice of life anime crossover worlds, but this is too dry for my tastes with a lot of forced drama, especially with the blonde girl. She constantly thinks and hesitates because of her illness but the protagonist could just cure her. After all, if he ever needs something, he will coincidentally get it with the gacha, it's what happened with the senzu beans after all. [>Character Design (2/5 Stars)<] - Not a good protagonist for the harem genre. A little too passive for my tastes. Relationships barely progress, and when they do, we are only told these things in a summary, not actually seeing it. The entire relationship of the MC and Shouko was timeskips and him being her friend. I didn't like the chapter of Raku because I'm not here to see the protagonists interaction with other males, but with his harem that the author barely develops. I sincerely hope he doesn't follow the same path his other novel followed by focusing on other characters besides his main ones. Also removed a star for a child protagonist, not what I came for in a harem themed story. Inb4 "DONT THINK WITH YOUR D!!!" Lol. Then why did you write a harem? If I wanted to read about a passive Japanese beta male I'd go read light novels. Despite meeting a literal god and being gifted a system, he was shaking in his boots by mere mortal Yakuza. [>World Background (3/5 Stars)<] - Hardly any detail or information given to the world. Besides there being no magic and there being more females than males, I know nothing else of the world. What is the school like? What is the name of the school? Is it similar to Earth then? The world seemed to be very dry despite being an anime crossover. [>Summary<] - Good idea, not so great execution. Author creates passive protagonists, and personally we have many contrasting tastes, despite that I tried to make the review as logical as possible.

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