Sadly, this novel turned out a rather disappointing read. The start was strong and promising with solid writing and good pacing, but the further the story progresses the worth it gets: the author tries to play around with time gimmicks but ends up messing the timeline, writing gets worth with sentences often left unfinished, characters suddenly exhibit inconsistent behaviours, the scenes often contradict prior ones. The degree may vary from minor details like a character that left the room still participating in a dialogue to major stuff involving the whole plot. There's also an issue with author piling up "mysteries" without ever resolving any of them. Even the titular "villainess" status is made into a mystery and left unaddressed.
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I'm sorry if my writing was inadequate, I'm thankful that you thought the start was great. I've never proofreaded this story, and I write at night right before I sleep because I'm busy in daytime and my creative brain works better. That's where the unfinished sentences come from, and I do fix it when someone points it out. You pointed out a lot of mistakes, thank you for that. If you've read until the last chapter to date, you'll know that Estelle has brought a meaning to her role as a Villainess. I also explained the concept that went on in the creation of this story, but in the case that you still can't accept it, there's nothing much I could do! I'm not going to change massive plot lines. Perhaps this story is just not for you. It's High Fantasy and honestly is just a brain dump of what ideas I can muster up. Alas, you've read suuuper far and I congratulate you for binging this work hihi Happy Chinese New Year!
To clarify; this was disappointing for me not because the story is bad but because it didn't maintain the initial level of quality. It's totally understandable that you're working under circumstances and I have only respect for authors that share their creations for free - you don't owe us readers anything. But it's obvious that the beginning of the story is much more cooked than what came after. I'm no grammar freak and can easily overlook the lack of style or finesse in this kind work, but it's not the case here - you don't lack those, just rush to much. Whatever the reason, I believe it's doing more harm than good. I've read up to chapter 64 but have up. If you think it'll help I can write why in detail.
Yes, it definitely can help! I'd appreciate a detailed critique from anyone! If you do feel like getting lengthy with your words, I'd love that but you're not obligated to hihi If you'd like, you can also share it over in discord, my tag is illeannne#8822 If you have any questions, too, you can ask and I will reply ^^ Either way, feel free to decimate me with your words :facepalmlaugh:
