The concept was interesting, chakra - Qi cultivation - one piece fusion but here are what I have noticed in this fanfic: Writing Quality : This fanfic is hard to understand since english isn't the authors main language. the first 10 chapters are the worst and then gets better but still hard to understand. I encourage you author because english is very easy to learn, so i have no doubt you'll get better. Story developement : There isn't much story developement. The story starts off VERY fast. The author tried integrating the concept of cultivation of Qi in his fanfic and it is interesting but the way it is shown is once again VERY fast. A lot of time skips so it's more of a wish-fulfillement fanfic. Character Design : There was barely any character design, we learn the name of the MC in chapter 9... There is almost no interaction with any other characters in the story and if the MC does interact, it goes very fast once again. World Background : There is no world building in this fanfic, probably because the author assumes everyone knows the world of naruto. All of the things that have been mentioned can be resumed to this fanfic not having much flesh around the bones. Author if you're reading this, maybe you could go a bit slower and add some details, dont rush.
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Thanks, man, hope you enjoyed yourself reading my novel. I am quite slow on the improvement aspect but I am giving my best. Thanks for your support :).
