It's a good first attempt, some things I noticed though are, 1) The Mc who is apparently 17 never mentions his family or missing them or how they are doing, so I am left to assume either A) He is an orphan, B) His family are dicks or C) He does not care about his family. 2) The training speed is too damn fast, when the god mentions his gift it was that he will learn faster, not be a super prodigy, the MC learned multiple techniques to a level thats maybe a few steps below master in like 8 months or something, when for even the greatest of prodigies it took years to get to that same level in just one of those techniques. 3) This fixation on the dark dark fruit is bad, he read the description about it trying to corrupt its user and he didn't even hesitate in saying " Yea i'm saving up for that", all because it would allow him to have 2 devil fruits. With the way his training speed is going I would say his best bet is to continue training khaki, don't downgrade to devil fruit, and maybe, I dont know, use his system to help fund research. Down the line maybe someone can synthesize devil fruit abilities without the drawbacks, because lets face it, in the one piece world not being able to swim and being weak to seawater and seastone is the same as on earth being alergic to dirt, its EVERYWHERE!!

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Not bad at start, and a good idea I thought, from the title and reading to the part where he gets a shop where he can buy and sell anything from the One Piece World, that the MC would train to become strong enough to protect himself (or make an alliance with the Revolutionaries or sth) and then grow a business to make enough money to live comfortably and at the same time put out bounties on corrupt and evil marines/government people and maybe at the same time cruise through the world with a crew What we get instead is a MC who is slightly retarded and has the morality of a ****stain that makes the arrogant young masters who make everyone die for something look like somewhat decent people. Killing without reason, a lot of swearing and general bad plot, making it seem like the author has anger management issues and lets it all out into this fanfic where he curses all the characters apart from the MC, murmuring "die, kys, you don't deserve to live" while writing. Grammar is also subpar, although still readable 4/5 don't recommend

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It started off good and got worse and worse over time. MC is a white knight who preaches justice while killing everyone in his way without caring if some of them are innocent. Basically a complete hypocrite. Story is also riddled with cliches like a typical chinese novel and has some dumb face slapping. Dont waste your time like i did after i read the somewhat ok start. Its a waste of time.

I need more chapters 😊😊. Well written the flow is on point. The smoker move i like it he really more suited to do anything besides being a marine. The only thing is i hope the author upload frequently. Good job thou.

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SUUUUUUPPPPPPPPPEEEEEEEERRRRRRRRRR VRAIMENT UNE BONNE FAN FICTIONS DE ONE PIECE. L'écriture est bonne, l'histoire se développe bien et c'est agréable à lire. Le MC est fou est J'AIME Ça. Merci à l'auteur pour son travail vous avez tous mon soutien 👍 👍 👍 👍 👍

I often imagined a one piece fanfic and what would be the perfect MC. And this character far surpassed what I had thought. In the world where the strong dominate the weak, it was very gratifying to read about someone strong who protects the weak. I confess that I did not have many expectations about this story. But I get excited about each new chapter. I've read very good and rewarding fanfictions like Prison Of The Dead, One Piece Highest Bounty, One Piece Talent System and God Of Soul System, but this one has a much higher potential. The idea of an adventurer guild in one piece is as perfect as chocolate with almonds, lol. I had already seen a fanfiction with the idea of an adventurers guild, but it was discarded by the author. Thank you for that gift to the eye, author. My eyes are pregnant, feed my eyes with more chapters, please, or they will not be born !!!